Friday, May 4, 2012

To Confess

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This week’s Trifextra challenge is simple, but ambiguous. 
Three truths and a lie. 
33 to 333 words. 


Here is my entry in 33 words. 


To Confess


To admire you, I gently undress you.

To show affection, I longingly caress you.

To feel powerful and dominant, I demand that you willingly address my insatiable appetite.   

I love you, my princess.




28 comments:

  1. This. Was. AWESOME! It just straight up rocks all the way around. Brilliant. Truly.

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    1. In a moment of panic, I changed a word or two just after I posted it, so I hope you were referring to the updated one. And wow, thank you so much! That really means a lot to me!

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  2. Interesting. It makes you wonder which is the lie, line three or line four.

    Fantastic!

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    1. I intended for the lie to be one of the two, although I can now see how either one could both work, depending on whom you think 'princess' is. It helps to have someone outside of my head to see that for me. =) Thank you for reading!

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  3. Wow! This entry of yours gives me goosebumps. Something somewhere is scary. I imagine an overly jealous, possessive, almost psychotic lover. Even if the fourth line is true, the speaker is still a scary lot. :-) Very well done.

    ~Imelda

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    1. It is very frightening, indeed. The original word for 'princess' was 'child'. I decided to continue the internal rhyme and make it a bit more ambiguous. Kind of disturbing, I admit, but that's what came to me from the prompt. Thanks, Imdelda!

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  4. I love this and agree. There is something frighteningly dangerous that lies within ... I also liked how the first two are being given to the object, the third is an action toward himself (does this make any sense?!) Solid.

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    1. Yes, it definitely makes sense. I wanted to show the narrator's twisted psyche through his wants and needs. Thank you very much, Karen!

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  5. I like this.
    Love the minimalism, which I went for, also. In another theme, altogether.

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    1. I find myself better at using few words for prompt writing. Thank you for reading and commenting, Cipriano.

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  6. Really enjoyed this one and speculating as to which was the lie.

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    1. Thank you, Kelly! I hope you decide on what makes most sense to you!

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    1. Wow, thanks, Mel! I really appreciate that!

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    1. Thanks, Ruby, for reading and commenting!

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  9. I really like this entry. I should have done some reading before posting mine :)

    I think 4) was the lie because when he feels isn't exactly love.

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    1. Janna, I thought your entry was beautifully written! I think you and I were on the same wavelength here. You are so right that what he feels isn't really love!

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  10. I will go with the love as a lie. I enjoyed the irony in this one.

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    1. Yes, that was my angle, too, although I do now see how #3 could have been the lie depending on whom you see 'princess' is. Thank you, Jessie!

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  11. Ewww and ick. Love? Yeah, right. Well written and ironic.

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    1. That was exactly the sentiment I was aiming for in this twisted story! Thank you, Diane!

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  12. It's cool how any of them could be the lie and no one would ever really know but him. Well done.
    Thanks for participating. Come back for the weekday prompt on Monday.

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    1. Thanks, Trifecta! Eager to see what the new prompt will be!

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    1. Thank you, Jennifer! And sorry for the late reply. =)

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