Saturday, June 2, 2012

1991

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This weekend's Trifextra Challenge:

Complete the following story in 33 words:
'It wasn't the first time.'

(The five words are not to be included in your 33 words)



1991 

It wasn't the first time for me.

Stolen glances
Muted gasps
Flushed cheeks
Imagined clasps

Patiently waiting
Always pondering
Impatiently seeking
Forever wondering

Treading fearfully
Climbing steeply
Stepping carefully
Falling deeply

But it certainly was the last time.




20 comments:

  1. Oooooo.....I love this! I hope I have this right, because it's late and I am sleepy...I'm sure I do, though....:)

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    1. I'm pretty sure you do... This one is labeled 'life vignettes', if that helps confirm. ;) Thanks, Kim!

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  2. That IS a complete little story! :)

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    1. Thank you, Sandra! I DO feel complete. And old. But VERY blessed.

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  3. (Your) love story! The first blush of love and the sweet fulfillment. :-)) You captured that so well.

    I love the way you opened and closed this poem.
    ~Imelda

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    1. Thank you! This one took me awhile, but I'm happy with what I came up with. Enjoyed yours, too, Imelda.

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  4. This had a great lyrical quality and told a good story!

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    1. Thank you so much, Libby! I'm glad you liked the story.

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  5. I enjoy the way you use this snippet rhymes, like a song or a collage picture.

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    1. Thank you! I like that -- a collage picture! I guess that was my way of getting more into 33 words. Thanks for stopping by.

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  6. Breathtaking .. if I can say that for a poem

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    1. Thanks, Ruby, for the compliment!

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  7. Ah, it's been a while since I experienced new love and the swirl of emotions that go along with it, but I remmeber it...and you described it well :)

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    1. Funny, but the only way I experience new love is in my dreams nowadays, much like the only way I can experience the feel of pregnancies anymore. Thanks, Janna!

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  8. Thanks for linking up. I like the description of this feeling like a collage. It very much does. I enjoyed it. Hope to see you around again soon.

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  9. Ah, those moments are so great! Terrifying, but great.

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    1. Yes, they certainly *are* terrifying! The next time I experience this will probably be vicariously through my daughter, I think. Which is even more terrifying! ACK!

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  10. I love this poem!! You shared your love story in such a great way!

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  11. Thank you, Rachael! I started this with prose, and for whatever reason, a poem popped out. You and I definitely share an interest in it, don't we?

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