Sunday, July 29, 2012

Incipit

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Trifextra Challenge:

Give us a 33-word opening line to your book.  That's it.  Make us want to read the next 333 pages of your work. 



Incipit

Because I was four-years-old and curious, I wondered what it'd feel like if I stapled my thumb (I remember gasping while blood gushed out); now, I wonder about anesthesia--because I am indifferent. 



26 comments:

  1. Will anesthesia really do what your character hopes for? I'd like to read more.

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    1. That's a good question! Thank you for reading and commenting, lumdog.

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  2. Trying again - Not sure where my original comment went. Love the voice of your MC. Love the characterization of the child and how that's changed as s/he has matured. And I want to know why your MC is indifferent. Nicely done.

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    1. Sorry you had trouble commenting, but thank you for this kind one. Leads me to wonder if we're all a bit more indifferent than when we were young children, in some ways.

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  3. An interesting juxtaposition of the curious child and indifferent adult. I certainly would want to read more.

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    1. Thank you, Tara! I appreciate your comment!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by and reading, Marie!

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  5. I'm interested in finding out how the curiosity turned to indifference. I wonder what effect the character thinks anesthesia would have.

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    1. Thanks for your thoughts on this story, Janna!

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  6. I'm interested in the journey that led him to indifference. Thanks for linking up with us this week. We hope you'll come back Monday for the new challenge.

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    1. Thank you, Trifecta! I really enjoy participating and reading others' pieces on these writing prompts. Thanks for all the time you spend on us.

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  7. I, too, would like to know more about the journey. Very intriguing.

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    1. Thanks so much for your interest, Betty!

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  8. Yes, very interesting. Great voice too.

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    1. Thanks, SAM! I'm so glad you stopped by.

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  9. Very intriguing and I have those types of thoughts --- I wondered what it'd feel like if I stapled my thumb --- and I am not 4 years old anymore. Although at times I feel like throwing a temper tantrum like one. :-) Great job and a wonderful hook to capture our attention.

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    1. Ha, I have weird thoughts like this, too, but I guess it's less likely for me to try them than a four-year-old might (speaking from experience, ahem). Thanks so much, Tessa!

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  10. You managed to pack a huge story into these 33 words. Nicely done!

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    1. I guess I'm supposed to tell that huge story in the next 333 pages, huh? Could be a start to something, maybe. =)

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  11. Now I am curious.. where is this going..? xx

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    1. Thanks for stopping by, Rosalind!

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  12. The things we do as children, simply because being alive is an adventure. It's hard to face losing that wonder.

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    1. Thank you for this this very special perspective, Cameron. I hope we can keep at least some of that wonder as we age!

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  13. I, too, stapled my finger just to see how it would feel when I was a child...Then as an adult I accidentally stapled my thumb---it hurt so much more than I remembered!

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    1. Really, Rachel? I'm not the only one! I guess that's how we learned not to ever do it again, at least not on purpose. The pain definitely took care of the curiosity! =)

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