Friday, December 28, 2012

I Wake



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This weekend's Trifextra Challenge is community-judged.
"I feel I'm able to get rid of any demons lurking in my psyche through my writing, which leaves me free to create all of this and to enjoy our family life, stepping away from all the fictional traumas and the dramas. If I write about family in crisis, then I won't have to live through it, I guess."
                    - Jodi Picoult

This weekend we're asking for 33 of your own words that exorcise a demon.  One of your own, or one from your imagination.  Let it bleed on the page.



I Wake

My tense body struggles to grip onto his heavy hand over a cliff.  He wants to let go; I don’t.

Our hands finally slip.  And I fall.

I wake before the dreaded thump.


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On severed relationships: who is the fallen, which way is the abyss, and whose reality are they in?  It seems we spend a lifetime trying to find out.



28 comments:

  1. Those are all very good questions. Now I'm thinking over my short-lived relationships and wondering if I was the one letting go...or pushing the person over the cliff.

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    1. Sometimes it's very clear-cut, but other times it is not so obvious, isn't it? Thank you for stopping by, Draug! (I didn't mean to be insensitive on my comment to your post; I was only sharing my experience--although I only had one sibling to care for. I hope you didn't take it the wrong way. :))

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  2. This is an interesting response, Sandra. Your questions at the end got me thinking. I've been both the fallen and the one wanting to let go. Either way, hitting bottom hurts.

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    1. You are right, Janna! Hitting bottom definitely hurts, and that's why I exorcise this demon by waking up. When I have those dreams, I have never felt the pain of the thump. :) Thank you for thinking about this post!

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  3. This is startling and real. Sometimes you can't hang on, no matter how much you want to.

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    1. Thank you, lumdog! For the specific relationship I am writing about, I think you're dead on. I really, really want to, but it seems as if that would only destroy the both of us further.

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  4. I wrote about these too..but you did it brilliantly. I do spend my life , caring, wondering, asking the questions..even here in my settled happy life...I wonder if I could/should/would have done better.

    thank you for this, it was one of my favorites.

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    1. Hi, Kir! Thank you for your kind words! I can definitely relate to your post as well, because I tend to dwell over things, too. Sometimes Life throws you questions that will never be answered, so we just have to let go, when we are ready. But like I said, I feel like I am spending my entire life getting ready to do the letting go.

      Thank you so much for stopping by! :)

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  5. Been there done that and I too always awake! It's quite scarey though.

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    1. Isn't it amazing how that fall feels so real, even though we've [likely] never experienced it?! Makes it super scary! Thanks for stopping by, Linda!

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  6. Wow!So beautifully expressed & I loved the fact that you focused on relationship demons!To let go or hold on-a question we all have to face at times & its not easy at all!In today's whirl wind life,lines that define a relationship are getting increasingly blurry & the question who gets hurt more keeps nagging at us...

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    1. Thank you, Atreyee! I guess when it comes to relationships, everyone has his/her own side of the story. I appreciate your stopping by to read and comment!

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  7. those are the toughest (dream) questions . . .

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    1. Indeed, they are, Barbara. Thank you so much for visiting! :)

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    1. Much appreciate your kind words, Kelly! :)

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  9. The letting go can be the scariest part. You captured that very well.

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    1. Thank you so much, Tara! I really appreciate your thoughts! :)

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  10. Releasing and letting go are hard things to do. To recognize when to do it or move on when it happens to us. I really liked this because it gave me much to think about.

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    1. They really are hard things to do, Gina. I'm flattered this made you think a bit. Perhaps we all have past relationships that mirror this little tidbit? Thank you for your reading!

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  11. "I wake before the dreaded thump."
    In every falling dream I have, I never hit bottom. It's like my brain has a switch in it that flickers off in that instant.

    Giving up control is incredibly hard for a whole lot of people. Great use of 33 words. :) Awesome job.

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    1. Yes! I've always wondered how our brain/mind does that!? But I am always grateful that I wake abruptly safely in my bed when the thump is missing. Thank you for your kind words, tenwordstory!

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  12. I like the ambiguity in the first line - who is holding on to whom? Who is at the top of the cliff, and who is hanging over the edge? In a way, it could be that both sides are falling away from each other.

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    1. Yes, who's to say we must fall downward? (Gravity, I suppose). But each party has his/her point of view, and thus that ambiguity. I'm so glad to see your interpretation. Thank you so much, Christine!

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  13. I love the imagery of the jerk from sleep as release from the fall of a relationship. Either side you're on in this scenario is rough. Thanks for sharing this with us.

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    1. Thank you, Trifecta! Happy New Year to you!

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    1. Thank you, Triumphant, for your yummy words! Blogger may have "misplaced you"--I think this comment belongs to "Interplanetary." :)

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