Tuesday, September 3, 2013

Pinch



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This week's one-word prompt is:

GRACE (noun)


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a : unmerited divine assistance given humans for their regeneration or sanctificationb : a virtue coming from Godc : a state of sanctification enjoyed through divine grace
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a : approval, favor <stayed in his good graces>b archaic : mercy, pardonc : a special favor : privilege <each in his place, by right, not grace, shall rule his heritage — Rudyard Kipling>d : disposition to or an act or instance of kindness, courtesy, or clemencye : a temporary exemption : reprieve


Pinch

Little girl
Spots a white butterfly
First fluttering, then stopping
On a nearby flower
Resting, two wings closed as one.

Little girl
Quietly and quickly
Pinches its wings
And picks up the butterfly
As she has done many times before.

Little girl
Watches the butterfly’s legs
Dance wildly about.
 “Look, Grammy! Another butterfly!
Today I'm gonna take her home!”

Little girl
Walks on the abandoned railroad track
Stepping, hopping, on wooden boards.
Arms out and flapping, she
Balances and teeters on one rail.

Little girl
Peeks at her friend--
Every now and then--
Between her forefinger and thumb.
She likes the look of her adorned fingertips.

Little girl
Approaches her home, stops and 
Examines her companion to see that
Its legs are no longer frantic, but
Still, wings partly blemished and wrinkled.

Little girl
Suddenly fearful
That she has hurt the butterfly,
Releases her pinch.
It shakes and spirals to the ground. 

Little girl
Inhales the tightness in her chest
And fists her cold, clammy hands. 
Still struggling, the butterfly
Flits about like an aired fish.

Little girl
Tugged by her hand to go home--
The same hand that stripped
The butterfly’s grace of flight--notices
The pulsing numbness growing in her two fingertips.



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18 comments:

  1. oh,oh-her first lesson in the fragile nature of life..excellent portrayal& I loved the title :-)

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    1. Thank you, Atreyee! First lessons are always the hardest, aren't they?

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  2. Very nice. I was particularly struck by your description of the butterfly struggling to live at the end. I could see it. Very poignant.

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    1. Thank you, Jean. I'm so glad that you could see the scene I played over and over in my mind!

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  3. very nicely done. A hard, hard lesson to learn.

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    1. It is an unfortunate but necessary lesson to learn for little ones. Thank you, aspiritofsimplicity!

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  4. A lesson learned. Very well done. The imagery was crafted beautifully.

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    1. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment, Freya!

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  5. Nicely done, Sandra. I feel just awful for the girl, but it is a lesson that we all must learn. Sometimes nature can't handle our excitement and enthusiasm.

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    1. You're right, Janna--sometimes little ones have too much enthusiasm and innocence! Thank you for reading!

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  6. I used to do that to butterflies as a kid. I always released them right away for this reason.

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    1. Hi, Draug, let's just say that this little girl never picked up another butterfly after this incident... Thanks for stopping by!

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  7. Wow, so vivid and true. I try to convey that to my young son. They have to learn on their own.

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    1. It's definitely more meaningful when kids learn on their own about the world around them. Thank you, Jen!

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  8. I love how you blinked to let her feel the horror a second before it hit.
    Poor kid. Poor butterfly.
    I also love the title!

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    1. Thank you, Kymm! The horror is unmistakable since she really didn't mean any harm...

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  9. Oh... what a way to learn a lesson, and a way to let a truth sink in. Poor girl. Poor butterfly.

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    1. Thanks for visiting, Imelda. It was a hard lesson to learn for a wee little girl.

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